As is par for this Author's course...
####PLEASE READ THE SUBMIT GUIDLINES####
"Your movie must not be a pointless "demo" or "preview" without any redeeming qualities!"
I've read it.... this isn't a demo or a preview. Its a short toon. I'm just asking for people to leave reviews that are of some use to me. Got that Mr. substitute teacher?
Very good work...
In fact, it needs nothing else...
The only thing that could improve it would be to remove something: the text. (and this might be just me, cause I'm weird and I prefer work that let's me put my own interpretation to it)
Yeah, someone else mentioned that, and I think you may be right. I guess the imagery is pretty narrative in nature, so perhaps it would be able to stand on it's own... maybe at some point in a couple month's i'll resubmit it without text
Sure sure, but...
Bees don't bleed red.
Yeah, but ya know...
Nice looking artwork...
But otherwise, mind-numbingly repetitive.
You have potential. You should use your powers for good, not evil...
But some of the animations were way too slow. The sound cutting could be smoother. And frankly, you can spent a little more time making the artwork really shine. Keep practicing.
Very Good, The Only Lacking Is A Good Microphone.
Nothing To Do While Waiting To Load. This Load Time Is Too Long To Not HAve A Loader, I Gave Up On Waiting, And So Never Got To See Your Great Flash, That's A ZERO In My Book.
Well it DOES have a loader. But I'm already busy 4 a better loading. Soon I will resend it wit a lower filesize and a better loading. Man I'm GODDAMN pist that it loads that slow! Well folks I try 2 fix this shit and I can use some help! Till than you have 2 wait.... and wait... and wait.
But Not Much To It. I Get The Feeling That Your Trying To Tell Me Something, But It's Like Talking To Someone Who Is Wearing Way To Much Cologne... Too Strong.
But, I Think It Could Be Improved By Some Voice Acting, Or If You Found A Way To Keep The Characters From Talking At All... Then Again, I'm Kind-of Biased Against Speach Bubbles In Animation. Something About It Just Bothers Me.
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